Dream Deep

I really like it. Especially this part: The old times when life seemed pointless. Now it is pointelss. That's really good. You said it very well, but can I say ...

Certain things will often leave me, Things that I can only hope to see, in a glimpse of light. They conspire with dark shadowed things, And glisten on the small ...

I thought that was pretty good. I'm not really a music geek, though, I just happen to play the piano (which is a nice common instrument) and like old 70s-80s ...

Okay, this is completely objective and you're not allowed to take offense. Pretend I don't know you. It was good. It was promising. It was also rather mundane and emotionless. ...

What can I say? That was completely awesome. I loved it. Real surprise at the end, but a very fitting surprised. If you ever paln to do something with this, ...

I really think you could do something with this, but I'd like to make a few suggestions. First of all, make sure you proofread. Here, look at this. A large ...

Though I salute your efforts, you really should drop the whole verb+name=dialogue. "whined James"? "questioned James"? "he exclaimed?" These are allright in moderation, but if you use them too much ...

It seemed very repetitive, but good job overall :o